【CET-6提纲作文]Modern Industry
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic given below according to the following outline. Your composition should be at least 160 words.
Modern Industry
1.有利之处:极大地改变了我们的生活
2.不利之处:严重地污染我们的环境
3.结论：通过进—步的努力可以得到解决
【范文】
Modern Industry
Modern industry has changed our way of life. Now we can travel by bus, ship or plane instead of walking or riding a horse. We can communicate with① one another over long distances by telegram, telephone, fax② or E-mail, without sending a letter. We can use electric appliances③such as washing machines, refrigerators④, electric ovens⑤, TV sets and videos to help us do or reduce housework or to enjoy.
In the meantime, modern industry has seriously polluted our environment. The products of the modern industry, cars, trains, planes, and buses, release a great deal of exhaust gases into the air. Factories discharge⑥ impurities⑦ and chemicals into the water and release gases into the air. As a result, our air and water are seriously polluted.
These problems, however, can be solved through further industrial development. In some countries, trains are run not by coal but by electricity, and cars are driven by solar energy. Families have begun to use propane gas⑧ instead of coal to cook their food, thus reducing air pollution. Scientific measures have been taken so that waste discharged by industry can be purified before it goes into air or water. Definitely, the more advanced industry will be, the more capable we are of treating its pollution.
【注释】
①communicate with: 和…交流
②fax: 传真
③electric appliance: 电器
④refrigerators: 冰箱
⑤electric ovens: 烤箱
⑥discharge: 排放
⑦impurities: 杂质
⑧propane gas: 煤气
【简评】
这是一篇根据中文提纲提示展开的议论文。
围绕modern industry这一主题，文章紧扣提纲要求展开各个段落。首先，作者用例证法和对比法说明现代工业极大地改变了我们的生活方式。第二段举出大量实例证明现代工业污染了我们的环境。然后，作者又用例证法阐明这些问题可以通过工业的进一步发展加以解决。最后，作者得出结论：The more advanced industry will be, the more capable we are of treating its pollution.
通观全文，我们可以发现举例法的多次使用。大量生动具体的事例增强了全文论证的力度，结尾处The more…, the more…句型的使用，强化主题，起到了画龙点睛的作用。
资料来源：新大学英语四、六级考点透视丛书：六级写作/李华田主编，武汉大学出版社，2006
